Title: Yes, Master

Author: Lucia

Reviewer: changminXmc






1. Title: 4/5

* The title wasn't as interesting as I thought it would be. Though I think it was ok for the story.

2. Poster and Background: 6/10

* I think the story would've been more attracting if you had a poster with the story. The background was ok, it did not bother me as much.

3. Forewords: 5/10

* The forward did not tell much but the characters only. There was little information on telling about the characters but you should've have a forward to tell us or the readers more about the story to get them more into the story.

4. Plot: 7/10

* The plot you had was similar to some stories I've read before but then these plots are somewhat my favorites.

5. Flow: 7/10

* Your flow of the story was ok I guess. I didn't see any moments where your rushed as much and you took your time to write the story.

6. Grammar, Spelling, Vocabularies: 12/15

* I spotted a few spelling errors here and there. For example:

"You gonna stand out there all night?" Mickey said impatiently.

It should've been.

"Are you going to stand out there all night?"

OR

"You're going to stand out there all night?"

7. Characterization: 4/5

* I did not like how you organized your characters. I think you could've been more detailed or wrote it differently. But I understand writers has their own ways of orgainzing so it did not bother me much.

8. Originality: 6/10

* The story creativeness of this story was nothing much new to me. I think you did your best on making it as interesting or creative as you can.

9. Writing Style: 9/10

* Your writing style was a little bit new to me but I did not mind it much. And at sometimes where you put something like this:

(Shin’s P.O.V.)

My new masters must be rich! Just look at this place… It’s huge! And so… so messy. Just great. I guess I’m going to have a lot of work to do around here.

(End P.O.V.)

I did not really like it. It was rather a bit annoying to me. Sometimes, when you want to write a person thoughts, you or writers use ' ' these to write their thoughts.

10. Overall Enjoyment: 13/15

* I have to say, the forward was not as catchy as I thought it was. Though after a few chapter, it became interesting and for me, you caught my attention to liking the story. Cause from where you stop, it is getting interesting. So I'd say I enjoyed it alittle.

Total: 73/100