Title: My Life and My Love Story

Author: bhaby_aiya09

Reviewer:changminXmc







1. Title: 3/5



* The title, for me, I didn't think it fit much to the story. But I guess it was ok. It wouldn't catch many readers.

2. Poster and Background: 5/10


* The poster was not as professional. It was cute but not as catchy either. The background was nice, it didn't bother me much.

3. Forewords: 5/10


* Your forward I must say, it was not so good. You could've put these the synopsis at the top and the beginning. It wasn't interesting much for me either.

4. Plot: 5/10


* The plot was somewhat, simple and not interesting for me. It seems too....original.

5. Flow: 8/10


* Your flow, I guess it was ok. I didn't see where you rushed much or tried rushing throughout the story.

6. Grammar, Spelling, Vocabularies: 9/15


* I was irritated by your spelling errors and grammar. Although I understand that everyone language isn't english first so I am going to point out some errors you had or what it should be like.

For example:

After you finished what someone says, you don't have to put ( ) these around the sentence. Like how you put this sentene,


(Ya Tou grabbed Gui Gui hand and walked towards the gym.)

It could've been like this,


Ya Tou grabbed Gui Gui hand and walked towards the gym.


No need for the ( ) in it.

And other times like this:


Mei Mei: "So where’s Aaron there?" (look around)


It should've been like this,


"So where's Aaron?" Mei Mei said and looked around.

7. Characterization: 3/5


* Your characterization, there was little detail on them. I suppose you could've wrote more detail for it or wrote it in a different way.

8. Originality: 7/10


* The creativeness was nothing new. It wasn't that creative to me. But very oringinal I guess.

9. Writing Style: 7/10


* Your writing style was like mines when I first started. I remember I used to write Jaejoong: "Hey, how are you?" for example. I used to write like that, but I didn't much enjoy your writing style. I didn't like it as much. But I understand that many writers/authors has different writign style so I will respect that.

10. Overall Enjoyment: 7/10


* I didn't enjoy it that much to tell you the truth, since I'm not a Gui Gui and Aaron fanfic lover. Sorry, so I didn't enjoy it as much as the fan/readers must.

Total: 59/100

P.S.

I do not give out perfect scores. None so far.